Eddie B.
by Brooks

Of the group of us who started together, Eddie had proven the most suited for corporate life. He was above me, but not directly, on the company's org. chart. Clearly, he felt his standing, in this situation, obligated him to deliver a motivational speech.

He leaned in, so uncomfortably close I couldn't make eye contact. I focused on his collar. While he spouted empty slogans (If I'm relaxing, I'm not achieving. Your dreams shouldn't let you sleep.), I noticed, under his perfect Windsor knot, the top button of his shirt had worked its way undone.

Written about 1 year ago
Tags motivation

1 Note

BillTaichi about 1 year ago

LOL, love it. I like how the protagonist notices something mundane while he is listening to Eddie spout Corporate crap, shows how unimportant he/she feels the stuff Eddie is spewing is to them.

You really showed a lot about the two people with this scene. One has bought into the corporate ladder BS and thinks a lot of themselves and another who could probably care less.

If you were to develop this more I would try and make Eddie seem more 3 dimensional but for the space you had I think this is perfect.

Good job!

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