Called on the Carpet
by Brooks

The door was nearly ripped from its hinges. Rushing down the steps, I take the last five in a single leap and hit the ground running. Behind me I can hear my pursuers slowly gaining.

Caught, I find myself counting my steps as I climb the stairs. Normally, I would take them two at a time but my feet are insistent on providing me more time to imagine the upcoming humiliation. If I had taken that approach when I started on this mission of mayhem I probably wouldn't be five steps away from that foreboding door.

Written about 1 year ago
Tags embarassment

1 Note

Nate about 1 year ago

I like the sense of urgency and the clear action. I'm not clear, however, on whether the narrator is who nearly ripped the door from the hinges or not. The ending almost feels like the beginning, as though we're about to go into flashback and see what led the narrator up to this desperate point.

Nitpicky: Personifying body parts isn't for me, but to each their own.

Brooks responded about 1 year ago

Thanks for the note, Nate.

I didn't think of the flashback angle, but I can see how it reads that way. Perhaps I'll take it that way if I expand this one.

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