Followers
by Brooks

My brother told me there were many kinds of ghosts.

"The only one you need to worry about are the Followers. You know when you're standing in a dark room convinced there's something behind you? Followers."

His voice trailed off. When it came back it was fainter.

"They're usually harmless, but if you're stuck with them for too long you go crazy."

Fainter still...

"Some people claw all the skin off the back of their neck trying to get rid of them."

Silence. Then the lights went off and he locked the door behind him.

Written 12 months ago
Tags fear torment

3 Notes

BillTaichi 12 months ago

So did he turn the lights off? Why would he want to be alone at that moment? Cool start to a larger ghost story!

Brooks responded 11 months ago

I was thinking that the narrator was left in a dark room by the brother. But now I find it interesting to think of the narrator leaving the room. Hmmm, something to think about.

Nate 11 months ago

I agree with Bill, this story's ending leaves me wanting more which makes me wonder if it's a story unto itself or not. I wonder if knowing the ages of the brothers would help the reader and of course, if you had more room, it may be interesting to get emotional reflection from the listening brother. Fun stuff.

Brooks responded 11 months ago

It's funny you say that, I'm the eldest brother and I used to torment my little brothers all the time. I tried to write this from their perspective with the younger brother (the tormentee) as the narrator.

CauterizetheCacophony 10 months ago

This story absolutely gives me the chills. It's something that's so real in life that it's creepy. When I first read it I had to impression that the narrarator was shut in the room with the brother, and the brother was slowly going crazy like he was talking about.

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