His
by jp2

With that he turned around and walked away. She stood there behind him crying loudly and called out I’m Sorry. He got into his car and put his key in the ignition but didn’t turn it on. He wondered if he was lying to her or to himself. It didn’t matter. She was in his past now permanently, where she belonged. He turned the key and pulled the car out of the parking lot and onto the street. He drove home without turning on the radio, strangely satisfied at the sight of her tears.

Written over 1 year ago
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Nate over 1 year ago

I'm a sucker for companion piece stories, so this and "Hers" work for me. I do find it interesting that the last moment in "His" is a sentence of scene description while "Hers" ends on reflection (yes, "promise" is a verb but it's not as tangible as "driving" home). Is this a small discrepancy worth looking at again?

If you're interested in more duality tales, read "Laughing Wild" by Christopher Durang to get different perspectives on the same situation by two characters, see the story through multiple characters' eyes in the film "Roshomon" by Akira Kurasawa, or read the short stories "Girl" by Jamaica Kincaid and "Boys" by Rick Moody - both are included in the 2nd edition of The Scribner Anthology of Contemporary Short Fiction.

jp2 responded over 1 year ago

Nate, so far you have given the best feedback out of anyone on this sight except with the possibility of Brooks. This is what communication on this thing should be like. Thank you.

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