It's Time
by Mike

He lay in bed, simply along for the ride that his failing system was offering. Slow, hesitant and lurching, his heart and lungs begin to resign themselves to the finality and say goodbye to tissue and fiber.

His entire body from cell to bone, united in adagio, pulls him deeper into peaceful darkness. Sounds fade, visions spill to blur and he is gone. First nothing, then nothing, and nothing again. Consciousness suspended.

Then, baby boots and smiling faces surround him. What year could it be this time?

Written over 1 year ago
Tags death reincarnation

3 Notes

Barry over 1 year ago

Sweet. Really, I love it!

The musical description of death ("adagio") is great. The repetition of "nothing" is very effective for me.

Welcome back, Mike!

wordshiv over 1 year ago

Agreed. I like how the last line seems to give the possibility that death provides the portal for time travel.

Nate over 1 year ago

Welcome back, Mike!

I think Barry's instinct is dead on and you could go even further describing death in musical terms.

Nitpicky: try "his heart and lungs resign" instead to activate the verb and I think 'goodbye' should be in single-quotes.

Mike responded over 1 year ago

Thanks for all the remarks, look forward to them. Nice being back :) I know I need to work on my grammar Nate. Shouldn't have dropped out of high school, haha! Appreciate ALL feedback, thanks.

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