The Receiver
by Mike

Day 18: I figure I have about a good four foot buffer until I start to pick up on the thought patterns. Generally by the time I'm within arms length it moves well beyond patterns and feelings and ends up pure lucid thoughts.

The lady in line at Target scared the hell out of me. All she could think about was shooting her husband with his own gun. I watched her get in her car and was tempted to follow her home. I can't seduce myself to get involved. How do I incorporate this burden into my life?

Written 8 months ago
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CauterizetheCacophony 6 months ago

I love it. It's amazing the feelings one can get from an incredibly short story. The way you write makes me feel that I really understand this person's thoughts and feelings. The story almost gives me an eerie feeling in my stomach that I like very much.

Mike responded 6 months ago

Glad you enjoyed :)

Nate 7 months ago

I had to read the story twice and triple check the title to understand the story, though now that I do it's all quite clear. The most interesting part to me is "Day 18," implying that this speaker has been wrestling with this new-found power for over two weeks and isn't sure what to do with it, to the point that they still cannot take action on their burden of knowledge. A lot is said in that small piece of setting.

Mike responded 6 months ago

Thank you Nate as always for your reviews and encouragement.

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